I agree that nowadays, food has become easier to prepare and this change improved imporved the way people live. Some people may say that preparing food was difficult because food skill was more complicated than the past. However, it makes people having more free time. Also family members all could prepare foods since becoming easier to prepare food. It makes family members help each other.
Some people may say that the simplified process is not beneficial since ....
조리과정이 단축되었다는 건 이미 전제로 한 상태이기 때문에 ...was difficult because food skill was more... 이렇게 쓰는 것보다 "어떤 사람들은 이와 반대한다(improve시키지 않았다고 생각한다) 왜냐하면..." 이렇게 써주세요 :)
However, the since food has become easier to prepare, people have more free time and family members can help each other better.
*문법오류가 많아요.. 그리고 문장구조가 다 조금씩 어색해요 ;ㅅ;
예문 쓰는 연습 많이해주세요 ~
내용은: 어떤식으로 삶의 질을 향상시켰나를 써주세요. 본인이 쓰신것처럼 엄마가 시간이 많아졌다. 이런 건 좋은데 너무 디테일이 없어요 .. 그리고 앞에 있는 시간이 줄게 된이유 부분이 너무 길고 실제 어떤식으로 영향을 미쳤나는 자세하지도 않고 갑자기 끝난느낌이에요.
First of all, becoming easier to prepare food makes people having more time. First of all, since food became easier to prepare, people can spare more time. Preparing food demanded a lot time in the past. However, Nowadays, the time which prepared for food is shorter than the past thanks to inventing various equipment for cooking. Also a lot of people could spend more time on what they want to do. For instance, my mother`s work in home could decrease on preparing food. In stead preparing food, she could utilize the time as free time.
Second, family members all could prepare foods since becoming easier to prepare food. It makes family members help each other. Let me take my experience. When I was the last year of high school, I had little time to support cooking. It is because I had to spend a lot of time on studying for collge admission. However, After I entered college, I could have a lot of time for other works. When I was in home, I began to support cooking. I could learn fast it is not so difficult. Whenever I helped to prepare food, my mother prasied me.
In conclusion, I agree that nowadays, food has become easier to prepare and this change imporved the way people live. It is because becoming easier to prepare food makes people having more time. Also family members all could prepare foods since becoming easier to prepare food. It makes family members help each other.
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