▶ Your Answer : In the given set of materials, there is some discrepancy between the view of the professor and the author over the issue of the possible cause of the will o‘ the wisp presented in the passage. The professor raises objections to the author‘s hypotheses that present in the passage. To begin with, the professor insists that the chemical illumination do not correspond with will o’ the wisp. Even though phosphine creates light, it is not resemble to the wisp. For instance, the will o’ the wisp has a warm and yellow color that looks like candle. On the other hand, a phospine gas produce a cool and greenish color. This is in direct opposition to the author’s assertion that a gas emitted by chemical phenomenon become the will o’ the wisp. On the top of that, the professor dissents over the author’s point on fireflies since their sizes are not relevant with the will o’ the wisp. To elaborate in detail, fireflies’ light looks like just small balls of light while the glow from the wisp’s is much larger than lightening insects. However, the author aruges that releasing light from fireflies is cause of the abnormal phenomenon. Finally, the professor goes on to expound that the barn owls theory is insufficient to explain the phenomenon. Actually, their reflection is not enough, so they not ‘flash’, although their feather is entirely white. To illustrate, they do not have a consist light source since they cannot emit light itself. Furthermore, owls are not floating in the air. They just fly in the air. However, the author contends that barn owls’ white feather reflecting light is the major source of the will o’ the wisp. Therefore, with these three convincing explanations the professor posits, the author’s assumptions are all rendered invalid.
점수: 23 일단 두 가지 부분에 있어서 문제가 있는 통합형 에세이입니다. 지금 이 에세이는 리스닝에 대한 부분은 충분하게 잘 전달 되고 있습니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 역할을 가지고 있는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리딩에 대한 부분을 한 문장으로만 서술하였는데. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 또한 통합형 에세이에서는 결론이 필요 없습니다.
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