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has been an argument regarding the issue of whether life today is easier and
more comfortable than it was when my grandparents were children. Some people
insist that life in the present is more difficult than in the past. From my
perspective in comparison to the past. In my opinion, however, life today is much easier than past. I will present two
reasons to support my viewpoint. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To start with, Invention of a smartphone make
people live more comfortable invention of smartphone makes people live more comfortable. People can easily search for all kinds of
information using a smartphone and find out the information they want to know
whenever they have questions. Therefore, they easily get any information. My
personal experience can attest to this. When I was young, I did not have a
smartphone, so I used to fear to go some place new. because I was worried about
losing the road. After getting a smartphone, one day I had to go somewhere I
have never been to before. Unfortunately, I lost my route. But I was not afraid
of that because of my smartphone. I opened my map application and found the
right way to get there. So, I quickly found my destination with the help of my
phone.
Secondly,
development of public transportation makes people go anywhere easily. When my
grandparents were children, there were no public transportation in my nation.
They should go to the destination by foot. Walking for a long distance is
really tough and takes quite long time. For instance, in that time, they did
not have a idea about traveling, because they could not think about going far
away. One day my grandmother told me, my grandparents had their honeymoon very
near place to their home. Nowadays I frequently travel via trains, cars, and
buses. Developing transportation makes me travel anywhere freely.
To
sum up, my stance is that recent life is more comfortable than before. This is
because the technology such as a smartphone and transportation are improving
quickly.
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