*문제에서 in nature는 "자연에서" 라는 뜻이 아니라 태생적으로, 본성적으로. 이런뜻이에요 ^^
"사람은 본질적으로 완전하지 않기 때문에 완벽해지기 위해 노력할 필요가 없다 "
에세이가 전체적으로 이주제와 어긋나는 것 같아요 ;ㅅ;
agree 예 : 노력하려고 지나치게 노력하면 인생이 피곤하다
disagree 예 : 노력하지 않으면 목표를 항해 나아갈 수 없다
이런식으로 쓰셔야되용
I disagree that there is no need to exert to be perfect since humans are not perfect in nature. In nature, humans are not perfect. Therefore, there is no need to exert to be perfect. Some people may say that human body was not too much strong in nature, then they had hard time surviving in history. However, human only tried to overcome their limit over thousands years even though humans are not perfect. Also people could survive in nature by using various tools with their high intelligence.
First of all, human only tried to overcome their limit over thousands years even though humans are not perfect. Most of animals just adapted special environment surrounding them.Thus, they could not protest their environment. In other words they Just tried to adapt their environment. However, human tried to change environment properly for better living condition enough though human body was not too much strong in nature. Fot instance, human lived together to protect other animal`s attack. Also They dominated some animals to develop agriculture. These human acts arouse positive effects to overcome their environment.
Second, people could survive in nature by using various tools with their high intelligence. Human could make tools for better living condition. people`s invention of tools makes them more stronger for surviving in nature. For example, the invention of house makes more protectable against animals. In addition, high intelligence with human could make language. Thus, people could accumulate knowledge and transfer knowledge to other people. Higher knowledge and edcation system make human more intelligent.
In conclusion, "I disagree that In nature, humans are not perfect. Therefore, there is no need to exert to be perfect." It is because human only is possible overcoming their limit over thousands years even though humans are not perfect. Also people could survive in nature by using various tools with their high intelligence.
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