Many people are not concerned about parents' role as an educator. So As a result, they believe that All responsibilities of education is up to teachers. However, parents are the best teachers for several reasons. They know well about their children and children tend to look after their parents.
Parents are people who know best who are best know of their children. This means absolutely important on education because if parents know about their children's interest or potential, they can provide children with the most best effective (이상한..표현?) education. 아니면.. they can support children with the most effective way.라고 해도되겠네요. Since teacher have to teach numerous students (.....학생은 선생소유가 아니에요 ㅠㅠ), so teachers teacher can't care about every students individually. Thus parents' role is significant because They know what their children need. For example, when I was a child, all my friends learned playing the piano. However my parents taught me playing the violin instead of piano. They exactly knew that I was interested in violin. Like this case, parents know better children's concern than teachers.
AlsoMoreover/Furthermore/In addition, children spend their time with parents and naturally they resemble parents. This is why parents' role is important. Children usually imitate parents' hobbies or habits. If parents show children nice habits such as, reading books or writing diary, there are positive impacts on children. According to a recent study, if parents are high-educated, their children tend to be more smart. This reflects parents could influence on children educationally.
저도 5월8일시험이라...대충해요..ㅠㅠ 근데지금 1시 13분 AM ㅋㅋ.
아무튼 제가보기엔 1.문장을 너무간략하게쓰시는 것들이있는데요 짧은거끼리 이어주세요 becase 적은부분
2. 문장시작을 also나 but, so로 시작하지마세요.
당장이번에는 무리더라도 다음에는 많은 표현법? 보시는게 좋을듯해요.
3. best effective...보다 most...아니면 best way라던지...다른표현법도있답니다.
이거는 단기간에는 무리라고보고요...자꾸 하시다보면 언젠가 단어선택이 자유로울듯.
처음 영작하시면 많이 생기는문제죠...ㅋㅋ 동의어라도 다같지는..않아요.
아무튼 오늘 시험잘치세요! 홧팅! (저도 같은시각 다른장소에서 치고있답니다...ㅠㅠ)