I agree with the statement, ‘Parents are the best teachers’, because I think our parents teach us the most important skills that we need in our life.
There are many examples of historical features of whose education was done by their parents. Many historical figures were taught by their parents. Even, there is even a saying that ‘A great man always has a great mother’. Thomas Edison is an example: it is well known that he was expelled from school when he was young and was educated wholly by his mother. If his mother had refused to understand him and educate him at home, I doubt that our life nowadays would be similar to what it is now. People may argue that he was born genius and all the works he did has done were the results of his exceptional brain. I disagree with that, because Edison himself said that his works were done with 99% of hard work and endurance and 1% of brain. (99% 노력과 1%의 영감: 1% inspiration and 99% perspiration)Whether this is merely a modest comment of his, it is not for us to judge. However, one thing that I am sure of is that his modesty and his endurance are the results of his mother’s education.
People sometimes mistake education to be building up facts. However, from the case of Thomas Edison, they should realise that it is not the knowledge that makes a person to be a great man; it is the personality that makes a person a great man. And from the past cases, I come to the conclusion that ‘the parents are the best teachers’ because they decide on their children’s personality and they teach them the right way to live a life.
*글이 전체적으로 focused된 느낌이 부족해요. 그리고 바디에 있는 토마스에디슨은 원래 천재였기 때문에 그럴수 있다~는 내용은 빼셔도 될거 같아요.
argument가 완벽하지 않더라도 reasoning은 정확히 해주세요 :) 어떠어떠해서 이렇다는 전개가 필요해요. -토플은 이유를 설명하는게 중요해요.
시간 다 맞춰서 쓴거구요.. 몇점정도나 될까요?