A lot of controversy exists over whether parents are still the biggest influence to mostly affect their children or not. Although some people may argue that children's surrounding have has more influence on their lives than parents do, I strongly believe that parents' impact is are still important. There are several reasons for this opinion, and I would like to describe two of the most significant ones. First, parents spend lots of time with their children. Moreover, parents deeply understand know anout their children.
Most importantly, parents are the ones whom children spend most of their time with their children. Especially, it is the parents that spend much more time when children make their own identity. Especially they spend most of their time with their parents when their identity is being formed. Therefore, one of the goals of parents is to make their children act correctly and say formally.lead them to the right path as well as teach manners. If parents do not act properly, their children will be affected by other environments such as television and films.=>이부분은 "부모님이 아이들에게 충분히 관심을 쏟지 않으면 아이들은 다른 매체에 관심을 돌리게 된다" 정도만 쓰시고 주장이 혼돈되지 않게 주의해주세요 :) 뒤에 나오는 예제도 부모님의 부재때문에 아이들이 티비와 비디오게임을 하게된다고 나오잖아요. 그러면 결국에 본인이 요즘 아이들은 다른매체에 영향을 많이 받게 된다고 주장하는 것 처럼 들리게 되요. 그리고 마지막에 지금은 잘 자랐다는 의미로 쓰신 것 같은데 , 그 문장 하나로 티비가 아무 영향을 안줬다고 말하긴 무리가 있는것 같아요. 엄마가 아이들과 보내는 시간이 많기 때문에 영향력이 크다는 내용에 맞게 예제를 다시쓰시면 좋을 것 같아요 ^^ 대체로 포커스가 안맞춰져 있어요. For example, I was a really good students until I was a middle school student because of my parents continuous taught. People believed that I must be a good scientist or good doctor. However, after we moved to big city, my parents were really busy to run their business. Then, they could not control me as they had do when we lived in the country. I spent most of my time playing video games and watching television instead of studying. In the end, I am a normal university student now.
Moreover, parents know their children's characters and behaviors well. This is due to the fact that parents have nurtured their children ever since after their birth. Thus, there is no better option to correct their children behavior well than their parents's discipline. For instance, one of my old friend was a good students and athlete, but he became a high school student, he began to get into troubles. This was because that he wanted to look "be cool" and win won more recognition from their friends. It was difficult for teacher to correct him, but it was easy to their parents. =부모님이 이야기를 잘했더니 아이가 변했다든지 구체적으로 써주세요 :)
In conclusion, I consider parents as the biggest still greatly influence on their children, since the amount time they spend with their children and parents know well about their children's characteristics and behaviors. Regardless of what others say, it become important for parents to ensure that children should experience good things that will have a good impact their future lives.
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