■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer.
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A lot of controversy exists over whether working for an employer is good or not. Although some people argues that being an employer is more beneficial than running own business, I strongly believe that advantages of working for themselves are more significant. There are several reasons for this opinion, and I would like to describe two of the most important ones. First, if people work for themselves, they can take better results. Moreover, they can get a wide range of real work experiences.
Most importantly, by running own business, people usually get better results.
People usually put in more efforts and are passionate with their jobs when they are running own business, because they want to make better results. On the contrary, it is difficult for people to satisfied with the working which are executed passively. For example, when I was a high school student, my friends usually made better assignments when they did personally than they were part of group members. This is simply because that they had more responsibility for their work.
Moreover, people can get a variety of knowledge from attending their work. If people take part in their work directly, then they will have a much greater chance for success. This is due to the fact that learning from experiences and contact with real work-world is remained longer than experiences from indirect learning. For instance, the Seoul National University in Korea has shown a study that the results between real work experiences and indirect work experiences. According to the study, people are better able to succeed when they are part of their work directly because they have achieved live knowledge.
In conclusion, I consider that running own business has a positive influence on our lives, since if people work for themselves, they strive for making better results and attain various experiences. Regardless of what others say, it is more important for people to realize the benefits of working for themselves.
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