Many people strongly believe that it is hard for people to occupy their positions at the same company for their whole life. ← 잘 쓰셨네요.
But there are also a lot of people who work at the same job in reality and around me. ← 이렇게 쓴다면
이것은, 어떤 한 직종에 종사하는 많은 사람들이 있다는 말 아닌가요..?
자신의 일에 오랜 시간 종사하는 많은 사람들이 있다는 말 쓴거 맞지요..?
But there are many people who have kept their jobs (or job positions) for a long time.
Many people have been working in their positions without changing the jobs.
In this sense,
I disagree with the above statement above, and there are for two reasons why I think so.
First of all, people who occupy at the same job may become specialist for their work. ← 많은 동사가
자동사와 타동사의 쓰임을 공유합니다. 그런데 이 단어 occupy 는 타동사로만 쓰이는 것으로 압니다.
즉, 목적어가 필요한데요... 꼭! 기억하세요
그리고 논리적으로 보면, 모든 사람이 다 그런건 아니니까요, most 같은 단어를 써주면 좋지 않을까요
First of all, most people who have been working in their jobs... ... (master their work)
(or became a master for their work)
They can do their work quickly and decisively, ← '할 수 있다' 도 좋은데요 그것 보다는
fine or great work 를 한다고 써 보면 어떠세요..!!!
and It could be directly linked with high productivity.
For example,
my grandfather who have worked at the plant which makes produces agricultural machines was awarded the honor of the best effectual worker last year. ← 잘 쓰셨네요. 그런데 이걸 두 문장으로
나누어 주는게 더 좋아 보입니다.
my grandfather... ... machines. He was awarded the honor... last year ((because of his astounding skill from the lifetime career)) (( )) 는 밑줄 친 바로 뒷 문장을 대신하여 붙여 써본 참고용
I believe that it was because his long career makes him awarded.
Secondly, lifetime employees may have proud of themselves, ← may have pride or be proud of themsel...
and they could enjoy their job. ← '무아지경에 빠지다' 란 말 go (or fall) into a trance 로 써주시면 어떨지
They have also stong loyalty for their company, ← 주절이 앞이면 콤마는 빼셔야지요 so that company can affect them important works easily.
For instance, in my part-time job where it is at a movie theater, one of the managers, ←콤마 삭제 who a manager who has worked at this theater for his entire life(,) is only able to take the biggest event. ← one of the managers
라고 쓰셨는데... 한 사람을 말하는거니까 그냥 a manager 이라고 하셔야지요
'위 문장도 혼자만이 그 일을 할 수 있다' 라고 쓰신거 같은데
A manager has worked ... entire life. He is the only one who can handle ......
In conclusion, I definitely believe that people can occupy at the same job for their entirelives. And it is due to the fact that their craftmanships and trust from their company. As you can see, people who work at the same company give their job effective results. |