■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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After graduation from high school, students should take a year off to travel or work before going to the university. Do you agree or disagree? | |
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As our society today is getting more and more competitive, students in high school under a lot of pressure to be accepted to the prestigious university. Some people might think that having a year off from study is waste of time. However, I strongly believe that it is beneficial for students to have a year off before starting study for two reasons. First, students need recharging time from fierce competition in high school. Second, it is a good chance for them to widen their experience outside of the school.
First of all, students need to take some time off to get recharged. In Korea, high school students are pressed to enter the prestigious university. Most students are tied up participating in a variety of activities in and out of school. When it comes to study, taking school class is not enough to compete with competitors. Students log on to the Internet to take online course, which are designed to get a better grade in the university entrance exam. If students do not struggle to get more knowledge with online learning, they can’t get ahead of other competitors. Besides, Schools and parents encourage them to enjoy various kinds of cultural activities. Even if the activities are not mandatory, students have no choice but to join because participating level is counted as well. In this sense, continuing study right after high school graduation will makes students feel exhausted.
Secondly, during a year off, students can widen their experience outside of the school. As most students have studied with textbook in school more than ten years, having a various kinds of experience is important to become a well rounded person who can get along with diverse people and adapt to the new surroundings. Let me explain my experience for example. When I was in college, I’ve wrongly believed that obtaining certificates and getting high grades are the best ways that I could do. At that time, because I’ve always praised when I got a good score, I thought that I was doing well. However, as time goes by, I realized that my life was lopsided. I found myself only sitting in front of the desk obsessively reading books over and over again. After that event, I struggled to push myself outside of the school to communicate with others and learn from them, not textbooks. Indeed, the time I met diverse people experiencing valuable things together has had a significant impact on my life. For this reason, to become a well rounded individual, I strongly recommend students to go outside of the school for a while and communicate with people and the world.
All things considered, students who graduate from high school need to take a year off because it helps to recharge themselves and to become a well rounded individual as well. | |
시간은 한 45분쯤 걸린듯.. 아직 연습이 안돼서 느려요 -_-;;
천천히 쓰라면 나을텐데 30분이란 제한시간이 버거워서 학원을 등록했어요.
유니버셜 에세이 마구 외워서 body 1개는 빨랑 쓸수 있게해주는 수업으로.. 아직 2번밖에 안해서 잘 모르겠지만.. 효과가 있겠지요..? 음음..
그럼 교정 부탁드릴께요 ^^