▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who believe that knowledge of the subject and concern for students are the most important characteristic for a teacher to have. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the two subsequent reasons. First, student's willingness is one of the key factors in learning. Second, the relationship with teacher allows students know the social relationship and roles in the society. To begin with, student's willingness is one of the key factors in learning. To be specific, No one can teach students who does not want to learn from him, even thought he has a lot of knowledge about the subject. Therefore, teacher should promote the passion for learning from their students by keeping good relationship with them. Let me bring up my personal story as an example. When I was an elementary students, I disliked the mathematics. However, the mathematics teacher who I met in 4th grade spent a lot of time to get along with me. Finally I became to eventually really liked her and became eager to keep a good relationship with her. It triggers me to study hard at her subject and I could get the best score at Mathematics in the final exam of the semester. On top on that, the relationship with teacher allows students to know the social relationship and future roles in our society. Students should not only get some knowledge but also learn social relationship in the classroom. Therefore, knowledge of the subject and concern for students are the most important characteristic of teacher. Instead of that Moreover, (어휘선택이 맞지 않습니다) great teachers make good system to communicate effectively among students and teacher. According to the study done by Seoul National University of Education, the quality of relationship with teacher effected affected (동사는 affect입니다) about the extent of student's faith for their future role in the society. In conclusion, the teacher's effort to communicate well with students enhance student's willingness in learning and allows students know the social relationship and future roles in our society. In this regard, ability to communicate effectively is the most important factor for teacher.
예상 점수: 21-24 총평: 글을 깔끔하게 잘 써주셨는데 약간씩 어휘선택과 시제에서 아쉬움이 있습니다. 과거를 이야기하실 때는 과거형 시제로 통일해서 사용해주셔야 합니다. 전체적으로 구조와 내용 전개 모두 부드럽게 잘 써져있습니다. 결론도 좋고, 서론도 깔끔합니다. 수고 많으셨습니다. |