■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : It is better to complain in person than to complain in writing. |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people might say that complaining in writing is more convenient. However, in my opinion, complaining in person has a lot of advantages. There are two reasons. First, talking about my dissatisfaction in person is the most effective way to complain. Second, people can find out other solutions easily. To begin with, only when my dissatisfaction is transferred directly, we can say our thought exactly. If people transfer their thought incorrectly, problems can be getting more deteriorated. Accurate communications are important in the current world. I will give an example of myself. Last year, I went on a trip to Hawaii for my vacation. At that time, there were some problems with my bathroom in a hotel. And I requested it to be fixed in writing on my way out. After entering my room at night, I checked my request. However, those problems were not fixed. Eventually, we had to change our room. If I had asked in person, it would have been repaired correctly. (이유는 무엇인가요? 메모 확인을 안 하기 때문인가요? 이유를 설명해주세요.) On top of that, when people have a chance to meet and talk to a person who made some problems, they can understand the situation and find good solutions. However, if people complain in writing, it is not easy to know expect how long it would take or what the reason is. For instance, there was a survey conducted by education majors, with 220 workers as respondents. The purpose was to understand their thought on , which ways they prefer. when they have to complain about some problems. A majority of them said that complaining in writing is more convenient and not burdening. However, over 96% of them stressed that this way should be spent more time solving problems. Also, they emphasized that if they had complained in person, they could have known the situation and found some good solutions. (구체적인 사례 제시를 해주세요) To sum up, when it comes to complaining about some problems, expressing one’s thought directly is more helpful. Taking saying exactly and finding good solutions into consideration, I firmly believe that to complain in person is a better option.
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. example의 디테일이 상당히 부족한 편입니다.
최대한 상세하게 서술하면서 논리를 단계별로 쌓아나가 주세요.
3. 표현이 어색한 경우가 많습니다.
다양한 문장을 보면서 깔끔한 표현으로 다듬어주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*