112. Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very ealry age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others belive that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
Whether to educate children at a very early age or to make them have a free time for playing is sometimes become an interesting issue in our society. Both sides are reasonable. However, if someone asked me, I would say that playing is more beneficial for our lovely children. Now, from my various experiences, I will compare both sides and explain my opinion.
On the one hand, by educating at a very early age, children improve their talent more efficiently. Young people have various ability that can make them more excellent. Because of those reasons, some people assist that children’s ability should be identified more quickly and improved. For example, my lovely cousin, Jane, played the piano at three years old. Her hidden talent was identified at early age and she can be an expert at musical field. If she did not educated at early age, she would not obtain those fame.
On the other hand, when children have time for playing, they can learn social skills like cooperation and improve their health condition. Children is growing and their health is the most important fact for their life. By playing soccer, children can improve their health, especially the respiratory organic system. Furthermore children can improve their social skill. When they help each other and cooperate, they can win the game such as soccer, basketball and so on. Actually, according to a report conducted by The National Statistical Office, children having many games with their family or friends have more social skills about 17%.
In conclusion, playing is more important for our children at early age. There are two reasons for this. By playing, children can improve their social skill and keep their health. Therefore, priority for children should be given to the playing life.
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