People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events(experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult?
There are definitely some differences between children and adults. An age can be a standard to classify children and adults. However, people do not think that an older people is an adult. I strongly believe that adults should have sense of responsibility and That children are changed to adults should
need an important events, experiences or ceremonies. Deciding an important decision by oneself and wedding can be important events that make a person an adult.
Most children's decisions depend on their parents or adults. However, when a child should make an important decision, the child can be an adult. In other words, an serious matter make a child who is a passive person a adult who have a sense of responsibility. Some events such as deciding a my university entrance, and marriage are examples which make an adult. For my experience. when I was in third grade in high school, I should decide my major in an university. Before I had depended on my parents. However, my parents said that deciding my major can alter my university life and whole life, I should decide and I have responsibility. Eventually, I decided my major, electronic engineering and then I enjoy my university life and studying my major. On the other hand, marrying a person also make a child an adult. Marriage means that a person should decide a matter, do the matter, and have a charge of deciding a matter. In this case, according to deciding, doing, and charging family's life can be happy or unhappy, For example, my uncle who did have a sense of responsibility did marry. At first, my uncle fell in enjoying married life. He always thought about traveling and shopping. However, after his son was born, my uncle felt that he should support his family, and supporting a family is a hard work. And then, he started to think about his job and a way to breed up his son. Fortunately, he who was a child was completely changed to an adult. My grandparents said that now my son become an adult.
All in all, changing from a child to an adult who can charge with some matter that I do is very important and needs some events and experiences. Making an important decision that can alter my life and marrying a person who I love can make a person a adult. Being an adult is very hard but very important.
정말 어려운 주제인거 같습니다... 모델에세이도 안보고 써봤는데, 도저히 책임감말고는 생각이 안나더군요.. 그래서 쓰다보니까 본론이 한문단으로 나왔는데, 예는 2개 들었습니다. 이런경우에 예1, 예2를 2개의 문단으로 나눠도 되나요? 그리고 실전에서는 서론, 본론. 결론을 일단은 다 갖추어 쓰는 것하고, 서론 본론까지만이라도 제대로 쓰는 것중에 어떤것을 선택하는 것이 더 좋을까요?