▶ Your Answer :
There might be some people who believe that the qualities of co-workers
do are not important to them. However, I personally disagree with the above idea and
think that people need two qualities in order to a good co-worker. Two
qualities are consideration and passion.
Firstly, considerate co-workers make people who work with them relax. (Why did you mention 'relax'?) To
be specific, if co-workers are so selfish and sensitive, people are not
comfortable. Selfish and sensitive workers always want to do only what they
want. (What is the thing they want?)Then, various and creative ideas cannot be coming are not come out from meeting with them.
However, considerate workers are good listeners and they try to understand a
variety of thoughts from companions. People who work with them together can
talk and suggest various ideas conveniently. Let me bring up my personal story
as an example. When I was in high school, I worked on my school project with my
classmate. He was very kind and we helped each other during while working on project. I could relax
relieve stress by working with him. Finally, we could not only save a lot of
time and but also receive the a good grade.
Secondly, workers who have passion always do their best. What this means
is that if people work with them, they could work efficiently. Since passions
are contagious, if a company have has a man of passion then most people in the
company would work harder as time went by. Let me bring up my companion's story
as an example. Jack is my old friend and he have worked with me since last
year. He always tried to work hard anything. When he was not in my company, an average spending time of one project that we have to spend on project was 4 weeks. However, after he entered my
company, the average spending time for completing the project was decreased up to 2 weeks. (How?) So, we could save
a lot of time and money and thankful to him.
In conclusion, co-workers are necessary to consideration and passion are necessary qualities as co-workers.
This is because considerate workers make people relax and the workers of with passion try to do their best. In this regard, I strongly agree with statement
that the qualities of a good co-worker are consideration and passion.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 3
| 2 | 2 | Score | Limited 10-17 |
- be 동사와 do동사를 함께 쓰지 않도록 유의하여 주세요.
- relax라는 주장을 펼치는 근거가 다소 타당하지 못합니다. - 프로젝트의 시간이 줄게된 것을 passion에 의한 과정들을 통한 것임을 언급하고 이 부분에 대하여 설명해주셔야 합니다. |
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