Nowadays, people are busy with many things. If you were given a short period, what would you choose?
1. Learn to play a new sport you never played
2. Learn to cook food in a different way
3. Learn to do some hand-made work like clothes
People today are living in a very busy world schedule. Many people want to learn something interesting which can help them feel happy in daily life. There are many options for them to select. However, the problem is that people do not have enough time to learn a new thing. So if I were given a short time, I would choose to learn to play a new sport I have never experienced before. There are some reasons why.
To begin with, many people have health problems due to their sedentary lifestyle. So it is needed for them to exercise regularly to maintain good health. In other words, people tend to get stressed by a lot of works, which harms their body and mentality. Moreover, many populations in modern society gain weight and are likely to be exhausted easily as a result of the lack of activities. I think having time for learning a new activity would be a very useful way to solve this problem. Furthermore, while the practice we played before (What is that especially?) might be tedious, learning a new game provide us motivation to do the game continuously. Also, as cooking and hand-made working are not outdoor activities, they have fewer impacts on our health.
On top of that, we can find a new exercise among a wide array of sports. This means that there are new sports that we will be able to learn in a very short time. For example, if we could play tennis already, we can learn table tennis or badminton very easily as well. In contrast, we have to consume much more time and energy to reach a certain level of cooking and hand-made working. (Why's that?) It is impossible to learn and enjoy them in a short time. However, since many sports games have similar rules, we can learn a new sport in a given time with ease.
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