■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with this idea? Celebrities can express their own political opinions publically.
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▶ Your Answer :
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping into conclusions. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that there are always multiple variables to the truth. Even though some may adamantly believe that celebrities can say their political opinions in public, I strongly think that such an opinion lacks coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, it is not beneficial to speak out their political ideas publicly for the following reasons: the opinions of celebrities can give people negative effects, and celebrities can be in trouble.
First and foremost, the ideas of celebrities can enable people to be adversely affected. It is obvious that having had a social impact, celebrities, such as singers, writers, and movie stars, can show their powerful influence when they mention our social issues, especially political topics. Their ideas can affect lots of people whether these are right. For example, when I was a group leader in grade eight, I had a huge misunderstanding that led to a fight with one of the members. She said the previous president in my country was very clean and honest. However, the president was already arrested because of his crime, such as taking bribes. I was curious why she thought the president was innocent. I was astonished that a singer who was very famous in teenagers said this comment on a TV show. Anyhow, she absolutely believed the singer's comment because it was broadcasted. After a few days later, the singer apologized to people that his comment was totally wrong. Had he not spoken about it in public, we would have never taken the argument.
On top of this, the opinions of celebrities can be contaminated. It is commonly observed that many media, such as TV news, newspapers, and magazines, follow sensational or controversial topics. (새로운 문장으로 시작해주세요) thus celebrities' comments can be good resources. Media usually change the content or deliberately extract from or add to some sentences or expressions to make it more attractive. For instance, when a writer who was well-known in modern literature had an interview with one of the magazines, he said he dislikes the opinion of the minister in Japan. A month later, he realized that the article of his interview was totally different from what he said. He was upset, but many already read this article. He got lots of emails, SMS, and calls. He was deeply hurt because of the modified content in the article. In this context, celebrities should be careful when taking an interview, especially political issues.
In summation, yes, it is virtually impossible to provide a completely satisfying answer to an open-ended question. Although the jury may be out of this given essay topic, we can come to a mutual agreement that the advantages of not saying political opinions from celebrities in public far outweigh those of speaking out political ideas from them for the reasons and details mentioned above. All in all, celebrities should be aware of their political opinions have a significant impact on our society. |
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1. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다. proof-reading을 꼼꼼하게 해주세요.
2. 컴마 사용이 너무 잦습니다. 가령 예를 들자면
It is commonly observed that many media, such as TV news, newspapers, and magazines, follow sensational or controversial topics
여기에서 many media와 such as 사이에서 컴마는 필요 없습니다.
3. 두 번째 바디 문단의 설득력이 떨어집니다.
He got lots of emails, SMS, and calls. He was deeply hurt
이것이 이유인가요?
대중에게 안 좋은 이유를 집으시면 좋을 거 같습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*