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Some people might think that hasty decisions
sometimes bring positive effect on one’s life. However, in my opinion, the
negative effect of hasty decision should be considered over its positive effect.
This is because one should plan their life thoroughly in order to live a successful life and they sometimes spend their precious
time on useless works.
To begin with, people who want to succeed
in their life need to make future plan not to go to the wrong roads. People
sometimes make important decisions without deep
consideration. They might make a certain decision just because their parents told
them to do that or their best friends did that and most of them we’ll regret.
To illustrate this point, I will talk about one of my friends. When he was in third grade in high school, he had to choose what he
will study at university. But he had not been thinking about his future job, he
just chose architecture because his best friend chose architecture as his
major. However, after just a few weeks he
entered the university, he realized that he did not have any interest about architecture.
He even experienced depression and he couldn’t enjoy his college life. This
story shows that hasty decision has a tremendous negative impact on one’s
future.
On top of that, so many people spend their
time on unimportant works because they don’t think whether they are doing the right work or not. They just do what they are
doing because they are doing that. However, this is really bad habit and can be
harmful in various sense. For example, there was a poll conducted by a Korea
Gallup organization with university students as respondents. The main purpose
of the survey was to understand the consensus view about the most regretful
what they made before. The majority of respondents ranked spending time on unimportant
work the most. An overwhelming 70% responded that they waste their precious
time since they didn’t think about their decision seriously and just have done
what their friends did. This survey proves that hasty decision takes lots of
precious time from one’s life.
In a nutshell, taking the plan to succeed
in one’s life and spending much time on useless work into consideration, the
disadvantage of hasty decision far outweighs the advantage of it. In this
regard, I firmly believe that people should avoid making hasty decisions.
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