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109. When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.
In modern society, immigrant is not as rare as it was. For example, my parent does not know anyone who moved to other countries in their life, but I know more than tem(*1) people even though I am a lot younger than my parents are(*2).
(*1) : may be ten
(*2) : It would be better if replaced with this : I'm aquainted with fewer people than my parents are
Many people choose to immigrate to other country because they want better jobs(*3) or to have better opportunity for achieving their goal.
(*3) it would be modified like this : want to get better jobs
In order to achieve what they want in other countries, I think they need to adjust themselves to the customs of the new country because it will help them to have better chance(*4) of succeeding their goal.
(*4) chances
The success of the life in another country depends mainly on how people interact with those in the new country. Many of my friends went to the United States or Canada to enhance their English for about a year. However, not everyone told me they improve their English as they had expected. As I listened to whey(*5) they said, I soon figured out that they failed to adjust themselves to the customs which were different from that of my country(*6).
(*5) what
(*6) their own
For instance, it is considered rude to beckoning a person with an index finger in my country, but it is very common in the United States. One of my friends really did not understand the behavior and he hated(*7) even after he found out that it is not a rude behavior in the United States.
(*7) hated it
Since he did not like the beckoning with the index finger, he was often reluctant to hang out with(*8) Americans.
(*8) I reckon that it sounds a little bit informal, so i'd like to recommend 'get along with'.
This caused him to study English along(*9) in his room which in turn resulted in less improved English of his(*10).
(*9) alone
(*10) It seems so weird. 'his English' is more natural, I guess.
Another problem of keeping their own custom when they moved to the new country is that they become more likely outcast(*11) by indigenous people.
(*11) I think that to change this to 'isolated' or 'helpless' is better. If you want to emphasize the social or political meaning of it, 'quarantined' would be most fit.
This causes the bigger problem that the above(*12) because there would be no chance for them to go up the ladder, especially for those who moved to another country for their job.
(*12) I don't know what it is. Are you going to just mention the above phrase?
In order to become a manager in their firm, they should be able to lead people by examples and to be a people person. Unfortunately, it is very hard for those who stick to their own custom when they live in another country because indigenous people would think of them are different which make those foreigners to be alienated. When I was in Japan as an exchange student, there was a man from India who believed a religion that tells a dog is a bad luck. When his boss, who was my host family, invited him for New Year's Day breakfast, he did not come. Later, I heard his boss talk about him that he did not come because of his religion. Since the boss's family loves dogs they have couple of dogs running around the house.
When people move to other countries, they go there to achieve certain goals. Those goals would be hard to accomplish when they are stick to their custom because it will prevent them to get along with people in the country who would play a decisive role in their success.
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