A growing number of students believe that going to class should be optional. However, contrary to the popular opinion, I strongly believe that a required attendance has a positive influence on students and class. The raionale behind is that a mandatory attendance can improve student's responsibility and the quality of class
First of all, I firmly believe that a mandatory absence plays a pivotal role in enhancing stuedent's sense of responsibility. It is largely because a required attendance policy require students to assume their responsibility for coming to school regurally. What is more, students are expected to result of tandiness and absences such as falling grades and make-up of missed work. For my experience, When I was a freshman in college, I frequently skipped class because I was totally free from my parent's and teacher' supervision. However, I extreamly shocked and frustrated when I received my report card with a series of D's and F's. Through this painful experience, I can have a window of opportunity to learn a valuable lesson that I must be responsible of my life as an adult. If I had not undergo this experience, I would have not been able to getting sense of responsible.
Moreover, I definitely believe that mandatory attendance contributes to increasing educational environment. It is largely because professors can effectively teach a stable group of students because students who diligently attend can improve their knowledge and understanding step by step. On the other hand, overall flow of experiment and disscussion is hampered by students who absented. For my experience, when I was a junior in college, I took a health class where absent was optional. Not surprisigly, only a few students concentrated and participated discussion of class while rest of students who had been absent and tardy doodled, passed notes, and even daydreamed. If it had not been for taking class where attendance was opitional, I would have been able to become health teacher by eagerly paticipating health class.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that a required attendance policy has a useful influce on students and class. The reason is that a mandatory attendance can improve student's sense of responsibility and the educational environment of class.
All in all, these are the most important factors for studend's successful life.
안나최 선생님 모델 에세이를 읽고서 써서 비슷하긴한데요~~
제가 나름대로 쓴 부분이 어떤 오류가 있는지 알고 싶어요~
글구 중간중간 빼먹은 부분도 있어서 혹시 이런식으로 쓰면 몇 점 정도 나올지 고수님들의 평가 부탁드릴게요~~
까만부분이 제가 좀 햇갈리는 부분이예요~ ^^