#163 Is the ability to read and write more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. As circumstance changes, tremendous things are emerged and depleted. Howeever there are several things that is not varied->don't change.; literate skills. I firmly believe those are much more valuable than past. The rationale bihind this is that distinguishing numerous information requires well-built reading ability. Moreover, by sending emails and using word processor, people should be obtained writing skill. Above all, recent century, reading skill is more indispensible than past. On the Internet locates uncountable information that we have to seperate into useful and useless one. Without distinguishment->Without distinguishing well, finders cannot achieve their goals because they have got ->gotten priceless, useless information. A renowned recearch has announced that the more high-technology becomes->the more high-technology is developed, the more reading skill is needed. In addition to grown importance of reading skill, writing ability also more necessary than past time->그냥 past아니면 past days. Like the seperating of much information in a reading field, people should write words correctly and properly to complete their goals. For example, an employee who have to sell products have to use intriguing words to allure buyers and a person who complains about the service should make their complain letter severely. As I have noticeed above, reading skill and writing skill became more considerable?->more important than past. I think that these literate abilities would not become less important even though time flows, because these skills are essential, basic to humankinds. 30분 안에 쓰기는 했는데 맘에 들진 않네요.. 필요성이란 단어를 갑자기 못쓰겠는거예요. 그래서 그냥 다르게 썼지요 ..ㅡㅡ
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