■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
It is better for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents than to choose a different career for themselves. |
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▶ Your Answer :
It is debatable whether it is better for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents or not. This is an intriguing question because opinions concerning this issue can be different relying on individual perspectives. However, I am in line with those who believe that It is absolutely better for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents than choose a different career for themselves. Apparently, the reasons are diversified, and I would like to scrutinize some of its essentialities that are mentioned here.
First of all, since the parents have worked for many years, they are already skillful about their knowledge. Therefore, the young people can learn from them easily. By and large, there is a big difference between having knowledge about their job or having nothing with their job. The former will be much easier to learn about their job and the young people would be (be동사 필요) confident when they work. I have an exact experience for this example. My father is CEO in South Korea, which I have had a lot of chances to look over the environment where he works such as how to measure the size of a tiny electronic device or when to wear a special gown to protect a product. This would give (시제를 과거로 바꾸어 주세요) lots of help for me when I was hired in electronic development department, Samsung. Through this experience from my father, I easily got used to doing works and my boss acclaimed me a lot.
Second, young people can utilize the resources of parents. What I mean is that as they are literally young, they do have few connections with other people, departments or so. This would lead to frustration when they start work. However, parents have worked for ten or twenty years, so they got larger (비교급이면 더 자연스러울 것 같습니다) relationship with other people. Thus, young people could use that in order to enlarge their business. For example, when I was in trouble with opening a device, I can ask parents who do I have to contact, and they just gave me a number of manufacture factory. Thanks to my parents, I could easily handle this problem. If I had chosen totally different jobs, I would not solve any problems.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that when selecting a job, they can better choose a job in the same field as their parents. All things considered, it is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been efficiently and precisely delivered with the reasons mentioned above. Therefore, nothing in my mind regarding the issue overweighs the idea stated above.
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. 전체적으로 에세이 내내 시제가 잘 맞지 않습니다.
과거 얘기를 하는 것 같다가도 현재형이 쓰여 버리고
현재형이다가도 과거형이 나와버립니다.
시제 일치를 가장 유의해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*