■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Your Answer :
It is hardly possible for the
contemporary people to deliberately set aside time to recall national histories
or revive the love towards their country. Also, it is not easy for them to
retain important mental powers, such as braveness or courage, in a world where
competitions explode. However, sometimes, a single statue may help the people
to jog the memory about their nation’s history and to get important lessons
from it. And I think the most appropriate choice would be admiral Lee sun-shin
for two essential reasons. Firstly,
Lee sun-shin statue can remind the passengers of the numerous sea wars that he led
against Japan and it can revive the patriotism of people. Admiral Lee sun-shin battled
against Japanese soldiers on the sea to protect Korea continuously. His victory
secured the territorial rights of Korea but he ended up dying in the middle of the
war. Seeing the Lee sun-shin statue, people will have a chance to recall the
national history and reinforce the civic pride. Of course, there may be other historic
figures who also strengthen people’s love towards the nation. However, Lee
sun-shin’s story is the most popular and the most famous one among Korean
people. It would be surprising if a single person in Korea is not aware of the
admiral’s story. Therefore, Lee’s statue will have the strongest impression
upon the people who pass by. Secondly,
through the story of the admiral, people can learn to retain mental strengths. In
Korea, admiral Lee is a representative symbol of braveness and courage. In the countless
wars he engaged in, he was faced with enemies at least 10 times bigger than his
own force. However, he had strong will power and courage. He didn’t have a fear
of death and pursued only one goal, which is to win. A Lee sun-shin statue will
always relay passerby a lesson to not be afraid of failures and pursue the
goal. In the modern society where people counter strenuous competitions, I
think it is crucial for people to obtain mental powers. Since admiral Lee
himself is the symbol (명사로 쓰는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다) of courage, I believe that he is the best to be made as a
statue. In
conclusion, admiral Lee’s statue will provide people with patriotism and reinforce
mental strength. To busy and stressed passerby in my city, the statue will give
a moment to revive civic pride and will power. In sum, I believe that the best
choice would be admiral Lee.
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1. 이유 두 가지는 모두 합리적으로 잘 작성된 것 같습니다.
사례도 적절하게 잘 쓰였습니다.
2. 문단 구조를 굉장히 잘 짜신 것 같습니다.
연결어 사용도 적절합니다.
3. 문법에서의 큰 실수는 없습니다.
다만 and으로 문장을 시작하는 것은 매우 좋지 못합니다.
다른 연결어를 사용해주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*