■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Having
time alone is the most ideal way to relax and relieve stress
Brain
Storming
Agree
1)
Fully focus on oneself
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Don’t need to get bothered by
others
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Do what one like the most
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Ex) my hobby(watching movie –
good)
2)
Save time and money
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Don’t need to make appointment
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use time and money just for
oneself
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research -> time and money
are less then others |
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▶ Your Answer : There has been an argument regarding the issue of whether having
time alone is the most ideal way to relax and relieve stress. Some people
contend that having time with others is better way to get relaxed. However,
from my perspective, by spending time alone, one could get rid of stress more
efficiently. In this essay, I will present two reasons to support my idea.To begin with, people can fully focus on oneself when they are
alone. They know what makes them relieve and refresh. However, if they try to spend
time with others, people need to make adjustment. It requires them a lot of
energy which make people exhausted. For example, when I was on a vacation last
year, I had to stay with my younger brother because my parents wanted us to
spend time together. But on the very first day, I got really tired because my
brother and I was so different. We had troubled with choosing food, what to do
and where to go. It was really stressful memory and through this experience, it
was clear that being alone is much better manner to reduce stress.
On top of that, spending time alone saves time. When someone want to
meet others, it requires them to spend much time. For example, they need to
waste their time on transportation or waiting others. But if someone try to
spend time alone, they can manage their time much more efficiently. According
to the research conducted by Korea Social Lab, people tend to spend more than
50 percentages of time when they are with others compared to being alone even if
they do same thing. This result demonstrates that being alone is much more time
effective.
To sum up, people can
concentrate on themselves and spend time more efficiently when they are alone.
In this regard, having time alone is the best way to relax and relieve stress.
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