■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : A teacher’s earning should be based on his or her students’ performance. |
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▶ Your Answer :
These
days, many students go to academy like Math or English. Also, when the exam period is near, children are nervous and
spend time in class and academy. So, I disagree that A teacher’s earnings should be based on his or her students’ performance.
First, each child has a different character. Some
of the kids are very smart, and the teacher tells them what to do, and some of
them do not (줄임말 사용을 지양해주세요.). For example, there must be children who need a lot of help and need
a lot of time because they understand the content repeatedly. So, it seems that
it is wrong to judge a teacher's performance by the children's grades or
results. Each child has different time requirements and
different pace of understanding classes. For example, in my case, (대소문자 구분) when I was in
school, I was a kid who worked hard and organized the lessons well. However, I
was envious when I saw friends who do it quickly and memorized it and studied
it again and again.
Second,
it makes teachers compete. Teachers must
support, help, and cooperate with each other, but they compete because of the
payment of performance. Children must take the same standardized test, but this
is very difficult when teachers compete with each other. Children will not be fair
either. For instance, I have seen such a case in a school. There was a
school that paid for its performance, but the situation at the school showed
that the children were unhappy, and the teachers did not get along with each
other.
In
conclusion, I disagree that (대소문자 구분) a teacher’s earnings
should be based on his or her students’ performance.
For two reasons, each
child has a different character and it makes teachers compete. So, I think it (대소문자 구분) seems bad that teachers' income should be based on students' grades. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. 대소문자 구분을 보다 명확하게 해주시기 바랍니다.
3. There was a school that paid for its performance, but the situation at the school showed that the children were unhappy, and the teachers did not get along with each other.
이 부분에서 예시가 너무 general하게 쓰여져있습니다.
상황을 보다 자세하게 묘사해주시면 좋을 거 같아요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*