▶ Your Answer : As an interest in the education field increases, subjects which are learned in school are became very important these days. Some people suggests children should have art and music as mandatory school subjects along with math, history, science and language. In my opinion, however, I think art and music do not need to be studied as a mandatory subjects. First of all, having art and music as mandatory school can make children stressful harder. Children are already too hard to study original subjects like math, history and science. In this situation, it would be big burdens to children to study more subject such as have art and music as mandatory subjects. Also it makes children be feel tired of the studying and less focus on original mandatory subjects. For instance, one of my friends went to many academies for studying after school because their parents wanted their child to get good grades on tests. If art and music had been mandatory school subjects, their parents would have try to let her go more academies. Maybe this story is not limited to her. Furthermore, it is not matched with the reality. Many tools materials like brushes, papers, instruments are needed to attend the class of art and music. We should consider various children who do not have enough money. It means some children does not have enough money to buy more tools implements. For example, my friend's family were going through financial difficulties during her childhood. does not have many money, She already spent too much money on buying to buy books for other subjects like math, history, science, and were hard to spend these money. If music and art had been mandatory school subjects, she should have extra money to attend these classes. Also, if the government tries to help these children, it is unlikely to support all of them because of the budget limit cost. To sum up, there are many problems if art and music are became a mandatory school subjects. In this regard, I assert that art and music should just remain hobbies not mandatory school subjects for children.
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