■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : The news media is a reliable source of unbiased information. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that the news media are (media -> 복수명사 입니다) a source of unbiased information that we can trust. However, in my opinion, the news media are not a definite source that gives us accurate information. This is because journalists write news journals depending on their own perspectives, and there are many news reports that do (주어 동사 불일치) not check whether the data are (주어 동사 불일치, data 복수명사입니다) fact or not. To begin with, all news reports imply (주어 동사 불일치) the writer’s point of view about the incident. The role of news media does not end up delivering information about issues around the world. Journalists always emphasize their opinion throughout the news. For example, there are various presses in Korea which have different perspective about the issues. Even though each press uses the same issue to make a newspaper, they all contain (주어 동사 불일치) different point of view because they emphasize different part of the issue to voice their thoughts. Those point of view can affect readers because journalists would write their opinion as if it is the fact. On top of that, not all news media deliver the fact after they check if it is true or not. Especially the Internet news often contain wrong information about certain issues. As the importance of how many people read the news gets bigger, it makes attractive headlines that can attract readers to click the news, rather than make an effort to deliver acute information. For instance, I have an experience reading a news report about certain celebrity which was not true. Before long, the press edited the information, however nobody was interested in it because the issue had changed quickly. Even though the fact that the news delivered was not true, the celebrity could not make up his reputation because the wrong information was already became a big issue towards people. (become -> 수동태로 쓰지 않습니다) To sum up, journalists write news reports using their own opinion and there is a possibility that news contains wrong information. In this regard, I strongly believe that news media not always deliver correct information to readers. 335자 |
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1. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
2. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다. proof-reading을 꼼꼼하게 해주세요.
특히 지금 주어 동사 일치가 전혀 되지 않고 있습니다.
단수명사에는 단수동사를, 복수명사에는 복수동사를 사용해주세요.
3. 첫 번째 바디 문단에서 point of view보다는 biased라는 표현을 사용해주시면
더 의미전달이 깨끗하게 될 것 같습니다.