전체적으로 어색한 표현도 많고 기초가 많이 부족하신듯 합니다.
아래 목록에 질문하셨던 분처럼 정식 에세이 쓸때는 축약향 쓰지 마시고,
it makes me so boring... boring 과 bored 의 차이점 유의하시고
also 는 비동사 뒤에 위치하며 본동사가 있을때는 앞에 위치.
Neither...nor. 구문 다음에 부정이 오면 이중부정입니다.
문단 구분할때 첫 5칸 비우세요. 그외 기본적인 연습이 많이 필요. 최대 4.0 주겠음.
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글 읽고 시간 보내고 끝.. 올린 사람도 첨삭 어떻게 될까 골아픕니다
Topic: Think of the most interesting class you hae ever taken. Why did you enjoy this class so much? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.
이 글은 제가 약간 주제에서 벗어나게 쓴 것 같습니다.
이해하시고 글 형식이나 좀....
The most interesting class that I've ever taken was a physical education class. Most people would choose the subjects like math or English which are the most important classes and most commonly people like to feel interested. But there is something that drags me to like the physical education class. There is something more intresting than math or English.
First of all, the physical education class has a freedom to do what you want to do. For example, when you take an English class, you would have a project that has some criteria that you need to follow. It makes me so boring to do the project in what a teacher want me to do. It is just a way that the teachers judge how well the student is doing, but it neglects the freedom that we need to have as a human being. In a physical education class, you can enjoy the class without having any stress if you follow just a few instructtions. More freedom means more fun to me.
Secondly, you can meet many friends in a physical education class. When you are in any other classes, it is too hard for you to make friends. For instance, you can't make friends in the situation that you need to write down something important that a teacher says. You have to concentrate on what YOU can do in every classes except the physical education class. In the physical education class, the most important thing you need to do is the cooperation. You need to communicate with other students in order to make the game more interesting. The communication also is the most important thing that you need to do when you try to make friends. It will be so exciting to go to the physical education class!
In conclusion, the physical education class is the most awesome class in all the classes in school. Neither complicated equations nor hardly understandable books don't give me any interest. Only the freedom and the friendship that you can have in the physical education class are what I want.