Q.
Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity.
Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live.
Answer.
Without a doubt, we all human beings depend on the Earth, which provides all we need to maintain our life such as food, energy, water and so on. Some people think that the earth, the only planet we live in, is being harmed by human activities while others think that this planet has been flourishing due to human beings. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I had to choose one, I would say that our planet is very dangerous because of a lot of misbehaviors conducted by people. There are several reasons and examples as follows.
To begin with, there are too many people on earth. In other words, the population of the world exceeds the capacity of the earth. This means that the amount of resources we can get from the planet is very limited. As a result, people today are destroying the earth to find more resources such as petroleum, coal, and woods. Seeing these events that devastate the world, we come to the recognization that human beings cause extensive damage to the earth.
On top of that, naturally, all humans have an uncontrolled desire to achieve their goals and happiness regardless of the result of their actions. To be specific, most of the people do not consider (품사 -> 동사) the impact of their activities on earth. Although people today know the seriousness of the ecological crisis caused by the mass extinction, climate change, and lacks of water supply, they do not take action promptly. This is because they do not want to stop their lifestyle, which has given plenty of threatens to our green planet. Furthermore, people do not consider future generations seriously, so they waste and abuse the limited resources, and dump many noxious pollutants.
To sum up, this planet where we all belong to is damaged and threatened by human activities related to the mass population and the greedy desire of human. In this regard, I firmly believe that our planet is in danger because of human activities.
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무난하게 잘 써주신 것 같습니다.
다만 아쉬운 점이 한 가지 있다면 바디에서 구체적인 설명이 부족하다는 것입니다.
인간들이 지구를 병들게 만드는 행위에 대해 더 자세하게 말해주세요.
바다에 쓰레기를 버림으로써 태평양이 giant garbage dump가 되었다든가
멸종 위기에 처해있는 동물의 이름을 언급한다든가
방법은 굉장히 많습니다!
수고하셨습니다. *^^*