▶ Your Answer :At first glance, it may seem
it is important for families today to have meals together. However, in my
opinion, it is not necessary to have meals together for the two following
indubitable reasons.
To begin with, there are a lot of other ways
to communicate with family members. To be specific, through texting, the phone call and the video call, we can contact with anyone whenever we want. Furthermore,
they can talk together anytime when they are gathered at home, not only in a meal
time. Therefore, the lack of family meal times is not a big problem to create
bonds between family members. I will give my family’s case as an example. Since For example, since all the family members are busy, we cannot always get together at meal times.
However, we call and text each other in the break time so that we can know about
other family members’ daily life. Also, after we finish all the tasks, we spend
enough time on talking together and sharing the day at home. This case
indicates that family members can establish the family relationship enough even
if not in family meal times.
Furthermore, people at present are so busy
that they cannot spend much time on having meals together with family members.
In particular, since every people have their own plan and more essential work
load, there is no need to have meals together especially putting their work off.
For instance, my friend Yeji Kim always have meal times with her family
members. So, she sometimes cannot finish all of her tasks. However, at the
recent presentation, she could not receive a good grade because the preparation
of the presentation was not enough. It shows that important tasks should be a first
priority rather than having family meal times.
In
conclusion, I am highly convinced that having meals together is not the most
crucial factor for families today for the two reasons mentioned above.
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