Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Both of compensating sports activities and offering library service have are a pivotal role in the university. (What kinds of roles?) Thus, somebody says universities should give the same amount of fund to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. In my opinion, however, I think that university libraries should be invested more than students' sports activities following for subsequent the two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, It it is wasteful for students to invest sports service any more. (Strong objection) A great mountain of items ,such as racket, tennis ball, bat and so on is easily broken or lost. In fact, students already know that the university always would be replaced to broken gadget without any trouble or warning. (Hard to understand) Thus, if many students do not try to deal with such items carefully, the policy, allotting same amount of money to sports and libraries, is considerably unfair. (Why's that?) For example, according to statistic data, among the universities which invest approximately same amount of money on sports and libraries, main expenditure in sports section is occupied with purchasing new items. This data implies how many students use the gadget without responsibility. So, it is so wasteful that the university invest more fund to the sports field.
Second, libraries outside the university is has somewhat insufficient space to get information. Even though some libraries exist are located in the city, there is a crucial limitation ; it cannot retain various books due to the narrow and room or restricted space. For this reason, Besides, not only do the students in the university go to the library, but also the residents frequently visit there. This is a main reason why the university should invest more fund to on the library. For example, in case of South Korea, two national universities in Jeon-buk and Chung-buk invested more fund (on what?) between 2016 and 2018. The service of the libraries in two provinces are were relatively not good lack so that many media indicate this matter. In response to this, each national universities planed to build a new library in campus by using increasing fund. Nowadays, each residents are satisfied with these new library and the authority of campus told that they will offer more service for residents in the next year by investing more funds.
To sum up, I think that the university should give more money to university libraries rather than sports activities because it is wasteful for students to invest sports service any more and the libraries outside the university has a limitation to offer optimal information to people.
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