■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The best way to travel is a group led by a tour guide.
Use specific examples to support your answer.
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▶ Your Answer :
For most people, traveling can play
important roles in their lives. As far as I am concerned, some people argue
that the best way to travel is a group led by a tour guide. With that being
said, I would have to say that traveling as a group led by a tour guide is not
the best way when it comes to traveling and a concept of freedom illustrates this.
: First of all, there are many ways that we
can enjoy tours except touring as a group with a guide. Unlike a group tour, backpacking
travel is a sincere way to enjoy the travel. This is because backpacking
travelers can stay and experience at one site deeply and enjoy the other sites
if they want to visit. However, group travelers with a tour guide do not have
enough time to see one site fully. They spend the majority of their time moving
one place to other places. Therefore, if you choose the group travel with a
tour guide, it would be less free than you thought it would be. To be specific,
a really good example is one of my friends' (소유격), Brandon. When he was in university,
he decided to go to Japan on winter vacation. He was considering for a long
time whether he should choose group traveling with a guide or not. After few
days, he had made a decision and packed his stuff to go to Japan. What he
really wanted to do at the time was not only visiting the places where he
wanted to see but also the places where he wanted to stay for a long time to
enjoy the vibe of them. While he was in Japan, one day, he visited to Universal
studio Japan, which is a kind of big amusement park. He saw that there was a
group of travelers with a guide and they just moved to next place without going
on rides. What they did was just taking a picture. Unlike them, Brandon enjoyed
all day at Universal studio and he told me that it was lucky and relieving he
traveled to Japan as a backpacking traveler.
: Instances of the same sort can be multiplied
indefinitely. When taking into account these examples, facing people, we may
safely arrive at the conclusion that traveling as a group with a tour guide is
not the best way. Although I admit that there may be some people who think that
traveling in a group with a tour guide is a perfect way, I strongly believe
that no one can ignore the freedom when it comes to traveling.
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점수: 25/30
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