■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
▶ Topic :television and movies have more negative effects than positive effects on children's behaviro.
▶ Your Answer :Some people think that television and movies can give more positive effects on children's doing.
However, In my opinion, Television and movies offer more noneducational effects for behavior of children
. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with,
Sencond, TV and films can make uneducational influences for children. Because they can bring about moral confusion. Forexample, whne kids watch a hero movies, heros on movies often engage in illegal activities to catch criminals. These hero's behavior effects to children's socializing. It can grow a antisocial human.
To sum up, TV and movies can lead to risky behavior and can bring about moral confusion. In this regard childrens are effected by TV and motion pictures.
일단 지금 이 에세이를 읽으면서 느낀 것은 전체적으로 설명이 너무 빈약한 독립형 에세이입니다. 각 단락들의 내용들이 너무 빈약하다 보니 전체적으로 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 지금 이 에세이에서 필요한 것은 좀 더 구체적으로 자신의 주장을 전달하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셧습니다.
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