■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Is the Internet a good or bad thing for music industry? |
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▶ Your Answer : While some may (위치가 바뀌었습니다) disagree, I believe that the Internet is a good thing for music industry. To begin, the Internet has made people be (be 동사 필요합니다) aware of new music with faster speed than the past analog media had done. We can listen to a latest album released just one hour ago through Internet streaming services. This helps cut cost for distribution of music sources, which is good for the industry. In addition to this, musicians have been well protected from illegal reproduction since internet streaming services have been in action. Making a copy of digital media with Internet based security solutions is technically more tricky than copying the past analog media without any protection. Thus, the Internet lowers the risk of copyright infringement in music industry. So, for these two reasons, I think the music industry benefits from the Internet. |
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. introduction의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
4. body가 상당히 많이 빈약합니다.
personal example 등을 추가해서 분량을 대폭 늘려주세요.
5. 이유 두 가지는 모두 좋습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*