■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Friends who are similar vs Friends who are different. |
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▶ Your Answer : It is debatable whether we make friends who are similar or not. This is an interesting question because opinions concerning this issue can be different depending on the individual point of views. However, in my opinion, I support the idea that we make friends who are different with me for the following reasons.
First of all, to survive in this world of endless competition, people should know people who are in a variety of field. Everyone is aware that being success is like a camel passing through the eye of a needle nowadays. One's ability can be clouded by other's abilities so in order to stand out, people should know many different people.To illustrate, Steve Jobs, (띄어쓰기) who is the founder of Apple, made great accomplishments in his lifetime. I read online that he was very successful because he had many friends who are different characters with him. When he created new i-Phone, one of he's friend, who is major art design ,helped his new i-phone design. Finally, through he's friend he was able to make dazzling and technical i-phone and it hit in the America. On top of that, It is required for people to obtain a wide variety of knowledge rather than deep knowledge of specific field. A person with a great amount of knowledge is regarded as 'a person of intelligence' in this world. On the other hand, those who have no interest and knowledge in various fields might simply be ignored. For instance, (대소문자 구분) when I was in college, I attended history quiz show but my major was piano and I had (과거 시제) no idea in history field, so I did not get any point. Finish quiz show I disappointed myself. (무슨 뜻인가요?) Fortunately, after one month I made a new friend, who is majors in history, and (연결어) he taught me a lot of Korea history and I gained my history knowledge. After I attended history quiz show again I ended up by winning the competition. Through this experience, I realized that making different friends gives me chance to grow myself. All things considered, it is my belief that my argument this regarding topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons mentioned above. Never should we forget that this issue may have a huge impact on our life. |
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1. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
2. 문장 성분이 빠져있는 경우
혹은 문장 성분이 서로 뒤죽박죽 엉켜있는 경우가 많습니다.
검토를 꼼꼼히 해서 문장 성분이 올바르게 배열되었는지 확인해주시기 바랍니다.
3. 대소문자 구분, 특히 연결어 뒤에 나오는
it이 다 소문자로 작성된 것이 맞는지 확인해주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*