■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : The most important quality for
a politician or leader to have is good communication skills. |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people think that
communication is not the most important quality for politicians or leaders.
However, I disagree with the idea that there is more important quality for
politicians or leaders for the following two reasons. First of all, politicians
can know what people want. Second, communications give politicians concrete
evidence of their scholastic progress.
First of all,
politicians service for the public and it is important for them to understand exactly
what people truly want. What this means is that communicating is right the
essential part of being the successful ones who think for people. For instance, Barak Obama, the president of the United States, who gives talks among schools
and companies to let people know what his goal is. At the same time, he also
allows people to ask him questions after his speech. Take recent talking for
example. Mr. Obama gave his words to public why people need to go to school on
the first Monday of September. He mentioned the importance of being educated
and the policies for education as well. The public got response of education
problems, thus feeling confident for their country because of Mr. President's
communication with them.
In addition, communicating lets the leaders know whether
their policies of management is appropriate or no. To be specific, without
communication, politicians or leader would not be able to determine how well they
are managing their countries or companies, making it impossible to know which
areas of their policies of management require modifying. According to a study
done by JYP institute of Sociology, the importance of communications as a
measurement of their management skills. (동사가 없습니다) Researchers discovered that
communications are a way for politicians or leaders to recognize specific information
about their good and bad policies of management. As a result, communications
motivate them to focus on their weakness with respect to their management way. Without
this method of tracking their performance, leaders would likely think the same
way of enacting their policies of management, regardless of their actual level
of management.
In conclusion, communication
provides (주어 동사 불일치) information what people want and give leaders or politicians tangible
clues about their political performance. In this regard, I strongly insist that
communication is the best way of building the character of politicians and
leaders of success. |
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2. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. 이유 두 가지는 모두 합리적으로 잘 작성된 것 같습니다.
사례도 적절하게 잘 쓰였습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*