When we go through tasks of life, we face many difficulties and barriers to overcome. And (and나 but으로 문장 시작하는 건 지양해주세요) those are the constructs that make us want to quit it and give up. However, there is a saying that never giving up is one of the most important attitudes we have to possess. I strongly agree with this point of view since never giving up helps us to achieve difficult tasks. The attitude of never giving up makes us get rid of the thought that we may not be able to make it. We tend to underestimate our potential when we decide to achieve something for the first time. Since we have not done it before, making the task done looks like a huge and almost impossible thing. In circumstances like this, never giving up can push ourselves to the end where we have the task done because we will make it someday even if it looks hard and sometimes feels difficult. In other words, never stopping teaches us how we should see the tasks and things to achieve in life: We have to do our best until we make it. Furthermore, we become more confident when we fulfill the task that we've thought almost impossible. This is another other (text를 봤을 때 another보다는 other이 더 어울리나, other이 완벽한 옵션은 아닙니다) thing which an attitude of never giving up makes us be benefitted. We can be confident in something that we have done earlier since we often evaluate tasks based on our personal experiences. This means that if we carry the perspective of never giving up, the possibility of achieving something difficult increases and we decide not to avoid it anymore. Rather, we would try to face it directly because we have done it before. Never giving up not only makes one be able to achieve something but also makes one be confident in doing it again and challenging to larger tasks. There might be a perspective which says that turning to another task when it's considered to be difficult is sometimes a good way. Of course, it may look rational since it can reduce time and lead us to a strategic way. However, the true meaning of achieving something comes from doing our best no matter what it is. Also, never giving up is the best way to make us do our best.
thing, that같이 모호한 단어들을 굉장히 많이 쓰는 편입니다. 다음 에세이부터는 이런 단어보다는 더 정확하게 주장을 나타내는 어휘 위주로 사용해주세요. 어휘가 많이 반복되는 편입니다. 쓰던 어휘만 계속 쓰고 계신다는 느낌이 조금 드는데, 더 다양한 표현이나 숙어 공부 더 해주세요. 그리고 never giving up이 키워드인건 알겠는데, 너무 많이 나옵니다. 동의어나 비슷한 어휘로 대체해서 써주세요 |