▶ Your Answer :
According to the
speaker, the memoir written by the Chevalier de Seingalt is accurate and
reliable historical source.
To begin with,
the speaker points out that the loan from merchant does not mean the Chevalier was
poor. Since converting money from illiquid property to cash would take some
time, he might have borrowed cash till he got the money. It contradicts the
claim in the reading passage that he was not wealthy because he borrowed money
from a merchant.
Secondly, the
speaker argues that the conversations recorded by Chevalier is accurate because
he wrote everything he could remember. This casts doubt on the argument that the
accuracy of Chevalier's records is not reliable.
Lastly, the
speaker asserts that it is unlikely that Chevalier would have bribed jailers
and escaped the prison. Because even other prisoners who were more influential
and powerful than Chevalier couldn't bribe jailers and escape the prison,
Chevalier could not have bribed jailers either. Also, there is an official
document of Venetian government that the prison had to replace its ceiling. It
explains that the account of Chevalier's escape because it would not have to be
replaced if the ceiling were not ruined by Chevalier. This disputes the reading
passage's claim that the account of Chevalier's escape using a piece of metal
is not trustworthy.
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