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Recently, a debate whether people can deal with problems on their own or government assistance is necessary have been brought. The answer is greatly varies depending on the individual's perspectives. After pondering upon the idea from several view points, I am of the opinion that government assistance is mandatory. I feel this way from two reasons, which I will explain following this essay. First, government's assistance to solve a problem is makes people convenient. I am an elementary school teacher. I sometimes face a certain situation that students need my help to fix their problem. To be specific, two students fight together and they do not know how to apology or who is wrong in that situation. When they feel difficult to fix this happening, I always help them (In what way?) and my assistance helps them to save so much time. A lot of people can face a problem, most of which are not solved on their own they are not able to solve themselves. In this case, governments assistance is mandatory. (How does this work?) Moreover, a research shows that many people think that the government assistance is reliable and is a good way to advance. (What?) A study conducted by the Mirae university is claims that the government should assist a person who have are in trouble. The university gathered a lot of people and asked them, "When you are in trouble, what is the best most important solution to to solve this deteriorating situation?". Almost Most people answered that they want government to pay attention to our concerns concern our difficult and make efforts to solve our problems overcome. So they wait for the government decide to assist them. Government assistance brings up comfortable (Wrong sentence) and many people want that. For these reasons, I strongly believe that people want that government must assist people.
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