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▶ Your Answer :
Most people believe that movies and TV shows affect on society. In my opinion, these kinds kind of entertainment influence how people think and moreover the way people behave. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, films and television adapt to the real society story inside, which people really go through. People watch a part of their life through on with 3rd person's point of view. By this, they observe calmly and can think about it with an objective attitude. That lead for people to look back their life and make them they think differently. Finally, they try to change their behavior to live better. And those share the other's life to show different routines routine of life of ones who we've we have never met before. Running into the character we don't do not know give a an insight of the world off unknown. Then, people realize the nation of human and get a consolation by realizing which most of all have their problems and they are not the only one have problems. [구체적인 예시가 없습니다]
On the other hand, people can find their role models model from movies and television who they want to be. If they have one they like, they follow them and act like them. While I was watching an American TV show, I found a woman who works work in the broadcast company and she was very professional and smart. So, I was observing carefully her to find what makes make her she great and learn things her behavior. And this makes make me grow growing up.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that television and movies influence the way many people live in their society.
This is because they provide a chance to look differently and furthermore to find a dreamed life. As a result, people are changed.
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Grammar(문법) |
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Word Choice(어휘선택) |
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Syntactic Variety(표현의 다양성) |
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Idiomaticity (관용표현 활용) |
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Sentence Structure (문장구조) |
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Flow(문맥의 흐름) |
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Coherence(일관성) |
글이 주제에 맞게 전개됐는지, main idea들간의 연결이 잘 되었는지를 판단합니다. |
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Overall Organization (전반적 구성) |
서론, 본론, 결론 등 글 전체의 구조와 main idea들이 잘 어우러져 있는지를 판단합니다. |
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문법 오류에 유의해주세요. 문법 실수가 많으면 고득점을 절대 받을 수 없습니다! 문법을 점검해주세요. 또한 구문 오류에 유의해주세요. 단어 외우실때 구문도 함께 신경써서 외워주시는 것이 좋습니다. 글이 지나치게 추상적이면 읽는 사람이 이해하기가 어렵습니다. 구체적이고 명료하게 작성해주세요. 상상 가능한 예시를 들어 자신의 주장을 뒷받침해주세요. 수고하셨습니다 ^ㅇ^ |