■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
In the past, people were friendly than we
are today. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people might say that people in the
past were more (비교급) friendly than we are today, while others do (주어 동사 불일치) not. There are several
reasons to support their decision. However, (대소문자 구분) if I were asked to tell what I
think, I would say that people nowadays are much more friendly than people from
the past.
First and foremost, people today are nicer because
of development of social networking service. These days, social networking
service is very active and more and more people are jumping into the sea of new relationship.
This helps people to be nice to other because more social network means more
open doors and passages to the other people’s life. For example, news and journals
connected from Twitter and Facebook (고유명사의 대소문자 표기) are much faster (fast의 비교급) than conventional
services such as newspaper or broadcastings. Social network services like Twitter and Facebook (고유명사의 대소문자 표기) and Instagram are instantaneous. Also, due to the easy access
of it, more and more people use them to report and show news and issues currently
ongoing in their countries. For example, when there was a massive water flood
last year in Hong Kong, lots of citizens posted videos and photos of scenes on
internet and cry for help. People from around the world saw the catastrophe and
sent relief goods to help. Thanks to these immediate help, Hong Kong could rebuild (could + 동사원형) destroyed houses, buildings, and take care of victims. Without the help people
offered, Hong Kong would have been struggling until now. More or less, the social
networking services are important enough to make people feel more friendly and
kind to help others.
Secondly, in the past, people were
struggling to live a life on their own and did not care for people under the
need for help. However, nowadays, people try to help others in need in variety
of ways. To be specific, there are lots of organizations and regulations made
by the government of many countries to help people. For example, there are law
offices run by the government in South Korea, which helps people with free charge.
The offices help the poor (컴마 필요 없습니다) families with lots of kids to foster, young children
who do (주어 동사 불일치) not have adults in family for law counseling and even legal actions. Also, there are world-wide regulations and agreements
written by convention of many countries. Those kinds of conventions cover not
only human problems, but also animals and plants which are in danger of extinction.
These agreements keep track of how many animals are being slaughtered for
human, and try to make the number down. Moreover, they try to help those
species in better life circumstances. |
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