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Nowadays, there are many types of a family from just one to the extended big family. But the percentage of the a extended family degrees compared to the past. In this regard, some people say it is no use of the number of families family. Others are still arguing big family is important. In my opinion, the extended family is becoming more important than ever due to loneliness feel lonely and the several good things of the big family.
To begin with, a non-extended family has a disadvantage that the members of the family easily feel alone. Usually Usally both parents are working out, and kids left alone in house when he returns return home. Moreover, their grandparents are live by themselves theirselves because their kids do not want to live with them when they become adults. As a result, kids and grandparents are able to feel lonely easier. (문단 띄우지마세요) To give an anecdote, I worked at a kindergarten kidergarden last summer. Soo always played alone. However, another kid named Lina lina lived with her grandparents. She had her friends to play a role acting with wirh her, but Soo did not. so Soo seemed always feel lonely, and sometimes She cried when it It was time to go home. Furthermore, Soo was jealous Lina lina owing to her happiness and not alone.
On the top of that, extended family has many good things so its importance is needed seriously. To live with not only your parents but also grandparents, uncle, cousins..etc, you can learn anything by form living together. Due to today's people are becoming more hyper very competitive competetive, and only thinking about himself, good things from living livinfg with extended family faimly are getting more and more meanings. So its importance is higher than ever. (문단 띄우지마세요) For instance, when I was a little kid, my parents were sometimes really busy, and did not having a time with me. Hence they bought me anything I want, I became a bad kid. However, mt parents felt something wrong, then we lived with grandparents, uncle and their cousins. At that time itme I could learn about being polite, devotion. Had it not been for the big family, It would not have been possible.
In this regard, I thought it is becoming more important about the importance of extended family. First, It is a good way to solve feeling lonely. Second, one can listen to others and feel the a warm heart and learn many things thing.
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