■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Friends are the most important influence on young adults. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. |
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▶ Your Answer :
The transition from adolescence to adulthood is important because it sets the stage for later adult life. Young adults seem to be influenced by many factors. Some people say parents do most impact on young people’s lives. In my opinion, friends are the most important influence on young adults. The rationale behind this is that they spend most of time together and exercise peer pressure. First of all, friends significantly influence young adults because of the amount of time the spend together. As young adults become older, they spend less time with their family and more with their friends. Especially, throughout their junior or senior in their high school, they always stick together most of the day. Drawing from my experience, I had to stay at school from 8:00 a.m. till midnight when I was a third grader at high school preparing for college entrance test. Whenever I had a problem, I always counseled with my friends and listened to their advice. This is because I thought that we were in the same boat and they have a better understanding of me because we spent lots of time together. Undoubtedly, friends play the most important role in adolescence years. Additionally, friends have the greatest impact because they exercise peer pressure. As young adults are adolescence, they develops a feeling of connection. They naturally want to be accepted by their friends and be popular. On top of that, peers strongly determine preference in the way of dressing, speaking, and even anti-social behaviors. For example, one of my classmates was a decent student, but when he became high school student, he got in trouble after he started to hang out with bad students. He started to smoke, rode a motorcycle without a licence, and even bullied weak students with a gang of students. Unfortunately, he was suspended from school. I definitely feel that the pressure to ‘be cool’ was so huge that he got wrong judgement influenced by the group of people he hang out with. In this aspect, adolescents’ positive or negative attitude is associated with peers’ influence. To conclude, friends are one of the most important contexts throughout adolescence. It is inevitable for youth to be directly influenced by their friends because of the time they spent together and the pressure of peer group. Therefore, it is of great importance for them to have a positive influence from their friends for youth’ health and well-being.
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시간 정해 대충이라도 빨리 쓰는 게 좋을까요? 아니면 지금처럼 시간이 오래 걸려도 나름 최선을 다해 쓰는 게 좋을까요?
글을 쓰려니 머리 속이 하얘지고 아이디어나 문장 생각해 내는 데 너무 오래 걸리네요. 아마 평상시에 책을 안 읽어서 그런거 같은데
지금 책 읽을 시간도 없고... 팁 좀 주시면 감사하겠습니다. ^^