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Words alone cannot express the importance of
room environment. One should not, however, fall prey to the misconception that
students with messy rooms achieve their goal more easily. I, therefore,
strongly believe that students with tidy rooms have more potential to greater
success. There are two examples to support the idea.
Firstly, there are an old saying and a proverb
in my country which is that 'Before doing the big things, just keep your bed
clean in the first time', and 'A little drops of water make the might ocean'.
What these famous sentences mean is that a little tiny things make your strong
foundation and make you to get more success. In a similar way, to keep your
room is a simple and basic work in our life. Although it is not difficult and
we all know about most of succeed people did that, students do not want to
follow the abovementioned words.
I want advice to students
that 정리정돈 cleaning your room in the
morning
I
want
to advise students that cleaning
their rooms in the morning make your all day more energetic and, in the end,
give you more opportunity for success.
Secondly,
simply, it is true that students can look for what they want to find easily.
According to the recent research, professor studies// work efficiency about
impact of their environment.// The professor divided student to?? two groups,
one group is in the tidy room and another group is in the messy room. Like our
expected results, in the tidy room, higher
efficiency on their work was observed in the reasearch.
As the studies demonstrates, higher efficiency help students to get more work
in short time. This can be applied to
all of our lives. Our tidy environment in room and office make us titled as a
efficiency worker. I am sure that
this discrimination from others make you achieve the success.
As I
mentioned above, tidy room of students is crucial matter for the greater
success. The importance of proper environment in our society can never be
overestimated, so I would like to urge people to wake from the illusion that it
is not bad to work and live in messy room. I would not think twice before
choosing to do so.
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