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In terms of doing research, materials that we utilize are significant. Since the quality of the result can be different depending on the materials, we should consider which one would be beneficial to our research. Some people might want to use printed materials, and others prefer using the Internet to printed materials. From my perspective, using the Internet to research has more advantages for the following two reasons.
First and foremost, there is numerous information and resources on the Internet. Of course, we can gain information/knowledge by using printed materials such as books and articles. However, compared to the Internet, the amount of information that printed materials have is restricted. The Internet is considered the sea of information. Since a huge number of people around the globe use the Internet, a wealth of information has scattered, and it cannot be compared to books and articles that have limited information. When I visited the library the other day, there were few people there, so I asked the worker about the reason. She said that not many people come to the library to research because people do not feel the necessity of looking for books due to the Internet that is full of tremendous resources. As such, the Internet provides us with infinite resources.
Second, using the internet is much more convenient than using printed materials. It is an evident fact that the use of the Internet is straightforward and uncomplicated. By typing some keywords and clicking icons, we can easily glean a lot of information. Moreover, we do not have to take some time to go to the library or specific places to look for information. As an example, I have never been to the library after I figured out how convenient the use of the Internet is when doing research. I do not have to take some transportation, look for and borrow several books. All I should do is to open my laptop on the desk at home and to search for what I need. The Internet is one of the greatest inventions in history. Even though there is unreliable information online, it is too convenient to ignore the advantages of the Internet.
To sum up, we can benefit from the Internet when researching since it contains countless information/resources, and further, it is so convenient to utilize. Thus, once we identify how to make the most out of the Internet, the Internet will a great and practical tool for various use, including research.
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