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Some people think
that cars have a greater influence on society compared to planes. However, in
my opinion, planes affected more on our society than cars. There are two
reasons why I think this way: planes have been contributing a lot to building international
social networks, and they also triggered the culture of traveling abroad all
around the world.
To
begin with, with the advent of the airplanes, it became possible for people to
move from one country to another. Also, interacting with people who are from
different countries has been so much easier than before. In the end, the
convenience of moving around and interacting with people from all around the world
will help people to think ourselves as one community. The study conducted at
Seoul National University in 2019 showed that more than sixty seven percent of
people agreed that they feel every part of the earth is connected. (Need more explanation)
On
top of that, planes also made has a huge contribution to on the recent trend of
traveling abroad. To be specific, there are a lot of students and employers who
go on a travel to another country whenever they are on a break or a vacation to
get away from the stress of the college life or work. This trend would not be
possible without planes because transportations such as cars or ships definitely
have a limitation on distance. (Need more evidence)
To
sum up, since planes made it a lot easier for people to interact with people
from the other side of the earth and help people to have a sense of intimacy connectedness, and to travel abroad, airplanes have been more influential to
our society than cars have. 채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 3 | 4 | Score | Fair 18-23 |
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