Test 9 독립형 - Compared to when our grandparents were young, life is more comfortable and easier these days.
Some people think that life has become more complicated when compared to the past. However, I think it has become much more comfortable and easier these days compared to the time when our grandparents lived.
First of all, everything became so much fast\er than the past. It is highly noticeable in our daily lives as well. For example, nowadays, it only takes few seconds to call a cab by using a mobile app. When we touch the screen once, cab comes right away. Even few years ago, one had to call a service center in order to call a cab, and sometimes the waiting time surpassed the time which could be taken to reach destination. I myself had an experience when I had an important job interview. The interview took place far away from my place, and the subway train I took was stopped in the middle because of an unfortunate accident. I was able to call the cab immediately by using a mobile app. Without the app, I could have missed the interview because the cab might have come late. This kind of mobile app is truly beneficial nowadays, particularly because time is one of the most significant elements in our lives.
Secondly, advanced technology also made us be able to enjoy more comfortable and easier lives. Compared to the past, it is not an exaggeration to say that technologies have experienced dramatic advancement in many fields including automobiles, bio-pharmaceutics and medical industries. For instance, cars which owns auto-driving technology have been introduced few years ago. It controls handles and excels automatically, so that it makes drivers drive much more easily than they did before. This also reduces future possibility of car accidents because it stops automatically when facing potential danger while driving. It is obvious that such technology made our lives more comfortable and even safer.
To sum up, it is undeniable to say that life has become much more comfortable and easier nowadays, compared to the past. Technologies have contributed to much faster and easier way to live, such as the examples mentioned above, and people nowadays are already enjoying benefits coming from the advanced technologies.
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