■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : People today spend too much time on
personal enjoyment – doing things they like to do – rather than doing things
they should do.
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▶ Your Answer :
At the 80’s or 90’s, working hard and
making money to survive with family is the mainstream. Whereas, YOLO(You Only
Live Once) became kind of trend and show how people live there life nowadays. YOLO
is sort of slogan yelling make people do whatever they want because life is
only one time. These change of mainstream causes people focus on their personal
enjoyment. Why it happened?
First of all, people had a lot of stress
and pressure for their work or things they should do. However, compensate is
not good enough for them because they do not want money or survive like 80's. They want to be
happy. You can survive with things you should do but you cannot be happy with
that. That is why people spend a lot of time for their happy. My job has pretty enough payment but I should work 70 hours per week. I have never felt starving but never felt happiness as well.
Second reason of people spend less time on
things they should do is efficiency problem. The thing you should do is only
for survive. What if you can finish your job earlier and you can spend time on
your personal interest? You will probably finish your job with efficient way
and enjoy yourself. When I was child mother told me that I can play computer
game after I finish homework. I finished my homework very fast way and played
computer game. If there is no personal enjoyment like computer game, I would
not finish the homework early.
As a result, I totally agree with that
people use their time for personal enjoyment more than for what they should do
and I think that is not negative situation. It is important activity for their mental health and stress control. |
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