▶ Your Answer :Some people think that working as a team is better than working as an individual, while others believe otherwise. The two possible choices may have their own reasons to support their arguments. If I had to choose one, I would strongly agree with the opinion that working as a team is better than working as an individual.
To start with, a society wants people who can work with other people. To be specific, through the complicated technology era, there are a lot of tasks that cannot be solved by individuals but must be dealt with groups. According to a research, one research institution showed the result that people who have ability to conduct for conducting tasks with other people in an efficient way are employed by higher-status cooperation (What is that?) rather than people who are willing prefer to work alone. This is because the administrations of the respective cooperation regard the workers who can work as a team as cooperative/social people a vauleable worker who can manage the difficult and complicated tasks much better than others. Thus, it can be concluded that people who can work as a team would have a better chance to get a higher status. (Do you mean 'job position'?) Next point is, if people work together with their own specialties, they can yield best results with efficient way when if comes to time and quality. It means that they can reduce their working time and areas that they should manage. In my experience, I had a two presentation assignments in one session. One thing is the assignment that I did alone , and another thing is the assignment that I had to work workng with my group members. After I turned in them, I got a better the greater grade for the latter assignment than the former one. What I realized is that working with team members can act in an efficient way in any terms. Actually, one member is good at giving a presentation in front of others, and another member is good at designing a presentation structure making design for background. For these reasons, I could reduce time to do for that, and I could nurture my own specialty such as researching materials. Therefore, it is obvious that working with together will upgrade people assignment with enhances efficiencies.
Therefore, this proves that working with as a team is more better than other choice. All things considered, it is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and precisely delivered with the reasons mentioned above.
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