There
is an ample support to the author's claim that several plans of actions will
make better the problem of bats known as a the white-nose
syndrome. However, the professor in the lecture gives some reasons as a
rebuttals to the author's point.
First
of all, the professor contends that elevating the acidity level in caves will
not work properly. One study has revealed that a certain fungus can live in all
of the kinds of (of the 보다 kinds of 가 더 맥락에 어울립니다.) harsh conditions. So they will survived in the
caves with high levels of acidity. Also, it will
be impossible to attain and sustain the
high levels of acidity in caves. This casts
doubt on the reading passage's assertion that, by altering the acidity level in
caves, it will be possible to make those pathogenic fungus be extinct.
Next,
the professor insists that antifungal treatments will have a side-effect on the
caves' ecosystem. To be specific, there are various species, and some are
essential while some are not. If people spray the drugs on the walls of caves,
many good species will be damaged too. Eventually, this will disrupt the
balance of the ecosystem, and will put harms on bats and other
species. This counters the reading passage's claim that adding the antifungal
drugs on the walls can solve this problem, because some types of drugs were
proven to be effective.
Finally, the professor argues that it is
impractical to make artificial caves to save the bats from the syndrome. For
one, making huge manmade caves, transporting, and caring all bats will spend
require (Spend 보다 require
(요구하다)가 더 자연스럽습니다.) tremendous
costs, about one million dollars. In addition to
that, when the bats come back to the nature again, they will be
susceptible to the same syndrome. This refutes the reading passage's suggestion
that artificial caves can not only protect all bats, but also give people more
chances to inspect them.
Writing 0-30 Score Scale
Good (24-30)
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